Nicholas AndersenI took a look at your book. I remember opening that google link up a year or so ago.I read several paragraphs. The story starts off nice with the conflict. My thing about the girl is, I want to know more about her hatred. I want to feel her hatred. I cant connect to her. I understand her character though.Another thing I dont like is that, when the girl starts freezing all her class mates and some start escaping, you dont go in to details. You tell me what happens, but you dont show me. Does that make sense?I want to know how her classmates felt when they were all being frozen. Were some scared, did some try to stop her? What did their faces look like? Did some pee their pants? Did some realize they had wronged her and got what they deserved?
